Sunday, July 1, 2012

Bullet Points (short)


Key story moving points


Sc1
·         Alice opens her eyes and finds herself in an inverted room.
·         She gets to her feet and looks around at her surroundings.
·         Establish the upside down dining room and its contents.
·         She calls out to see if anyone is around.
·         She tries to reach up toward the dining table above but it was just out of her reach.
·         She makes her way to the back door of the house and opens the door and peers outside



Sc2
·         A short bulky old man of around sixty walks slowly through the well lit corridor of the hospital ward. He had a slight limp on one leg.
·         Establish the man and show visually that he is conflicted in his mind.
·         He finally reaches the doorway of the room.


Sc3
·         Alice tries to touch the grass that grew on the ground above. It too was just out of reach.
·         A crow flew by from the rooftop beneath her, startling her. She quickly pulls herself back inside and shuts the door behind her. The room has changed
·         Establish the study room.
·         Alice tries to reach for a photo frame on her study table but it was just out of reach.
·         She goes to the door at the other end of the room and opens it.
·         Establish the stair well where a bizarre number of stairways began ended and intersected.
·         A glimmer of light appears on the opposite wall and darts here and there across the wall.
·         “Is there anyone down there!” she calls out and quickly runs down the topsy-turvy staircase.
·         She can hear voices coming from the floor beneath. Voices quarreling. Then she hears a door shut.
·         She reaches the room at the base of the stairs.
·         Establish the room.
·          Alice walks in looks around and realizes where she is.
·         She looks up and sees her dead mother in her funeral casket.
·         Alice reaches out to touch mother’s pale lifeless face but it was just out of reach.
·         Her eyes begin to water and she runs out of the room.
·         The tears that fell from her eye sparkle in the low candle light as they float down.


Sc 4
·         The bulky man stands by the door of the hospital room unsure as to whether he should enter or not.
·         Establish the hospital room.
·         “Good evening Mr. McMahon.” the doctor addressed the man and asks him to be seated.
·         The man sits by Alice’s bedside.
·         Establish Alice’s condition
·         Reveal the fathers’ pain
·         The man breaks down and begins to sob into his daughters’ hand.


Sc 5
·         Establish Alice sitting alone and crying in a large empty room.
·         She tries to paint, but gives up.
·         Her shadow slowly sits up beside her and tries to comfort her.
·         Alice falls in love with the shadow and they make love. Fade out.
·         Alice wakes up to find herself lying alone on the floor with a sheet wrapped around her naked body.
·         She is upset as she knows he won’t come back
·         She sees the tiny dancing light on the floor and follows it and reaches the wooden door leading out of the room.


Sc6
·         Alice enters the Hall of Mirrors. Establish the Hall.
·         The mirror reflections do not have faces.
·         She wears a mask lying on the floor and checks herself.
·         When a mask latches on to her she tries to break free and run.
·         The hall collapses and she plunges into dark waters.


Sc7
·         The cardiogram rings an offbeat.
·         The old man lifts his head up and realizes something is wrong.
·         Alice has a cardiac arrest.
·         The cardiogram flat lines.


Sc8
·         ­Her body bleeds and sinks. She feels her life ebb away.
·         Suddenly there is a small glint of light just above her, and she knows what to do.
·         With all her might she paddles against the current and breaks the water surface.
·         A hand grabs hers.
·         There is light everywhere.

Sc9

     - Alice opened her eyes.
     - She sees her father beside her bed.
     - “Daddy!” her eyes well up as she smiles weakly at him.
     - The light reflected from the man’s watch dances on her face.

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